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NIGHTMARE ON ELM STREET: INNOCENT DEMON

Chapter I:  "The Gardener"

REVISED EDITION
Written by Abri Isgrig and Diane N. Tran


Weeding the last remnants of dead leaves and grass with a three-pronged fork, Freddy Krueger rested on his hands and knees while he stabbed a small spade into ground.  Its surface was dried and cracked due to the heat of the summer sun, but the seasons were changing and autumn was approaching.  It was a new school year at Badham Preschool, just a week in.  He chiseled a hole and scooped through the rich soil that hid underneath before he dug another one beside it.

The man whistled to himself and feigned ignorance to the fact that the three small children were sneaking up behind him, sniggering behind their tiny hands, as he pretended to be focused on planting the new stonecrops and chrysanthemums.

"Wanna play tag with us, Mr. Freddy?" asked Kris Fowles, surprising him by jumping and hugging him from behind.  "You're it!"

The gardener smiled at the child wickedly.  Raising the gardening fork in his gloved hand in the air, his serpentine tongue slithered across his front teeth, which gleamed in delight.  He hoisted his shoulders high, making himself look larger than he was, and exhaled a long, wild snarl and gritted his teeth, as he pretended he was a large bear.  He watched Kris gasp at him and scurry away with a playful scream and a shrill giggle.  He fell to the ground and laughed, wiping a happy tear from his eye.

Sweet girl.  Only five years old.  With shoulder-length, honey-blond hair.  Such an angelic, little creature.

"Sounds fun," the gardener answered, turning to completely face Kris and her playmates.  He groaned as he made to stand, feeling the individual bones of his spine pop, and winced.

"You okay, Mr. Freddy?" asked the little brunette, her hair tied to the side of her head, standing next to Kris.

Her name was Nancy Holbrook.  Beautiful, little Nancy.

"Hmm?  Oh, yeah, I'm all right," he nodded, rubbing the back of his neck.  "I just get stiff from being on my knees all the — tag!"  He grinned, as he lightly tapped his finger on Nancy's shoulder, letting out a joyous cackle before he broke into a slow jog, so the kids could try to catch him but still be ahead of their tiny grasps.

"Hey, no fair!" pouted Nancy, running after him as Kris and one of the boys, Quentin Smith, gave chase, all laughing gleefully.

Freddy ran behind a tree, grinning from ear to ear.  Looking up, an idea struck him and he turned to face the tree, as Nancy, Kris, and Quentin tip-toed toward his hiding place.

"Got you, Mr. Freddy!" exclaimed Nancy, reaching out to pounce him.  But Mr. Freddy was gone.  She blinked, spinning in a circle and searching around the tree baffled.  "Huh?  Where'd he go?"

Kris and Quentin scratched their heads, as they both looked around with her with confusion upon their cherubic faces.  The other children joined in, circling the tree, and poked at the bushes around it, only to gasp and jump when they heard the sound of a voice singing:
    ONE, TWO... FREDDY'S COMING FOR YOU...
Krueger jumped down from the tree branch he'd been sitting on.  He had spotted the limb above his head and had quickly, though with less skills than his younger days, climbed up the trunk of the tree to hide.  He landed with a mischievous "boo," causing the little ones to squeal with delight before they all went to tackle him when he attempted to stand.

"Oh, no, they've got me!" the gardener cried, sniggering, as they began to tickle him.  Quentin and the other boys, Dean Russell and Marcus Yeon, clung to his legs and tickled his knees, while Kris and Nancy tickled his stomach.  Jesse Braun and Leah Uteg went for his sides, as Freddy laughed and curled lightly, their tiny fingers poking and tickling him.

Neither Freddy nor the children saw the young, raven-haired teacher smiling at the sight on the playground.

Neither Freddy nor the children saw the young, raven-haired teacher smiling at the sight on the playground.  Caressing her hands lightly over her tiny bulge of her stomach with contented sigh, Loretta Krueger chuckled at the thought of how a wonderful of father her husband would make before he finally took notice of her and attempted to squirm away from the children.

"Ack, Loretta!  Help!"

"All right, kiddies, that's enough," said Loretta, clapping her hands for their attention.  She was in full-on teacher mode now.  The children all groaned and pouted, as she walked their way.  "Your parents are here to get you.  We'll see everyone tomorrow."

The kids all cheered, as they grabbed their little bags and lunch pails, laying against the fence where their parents were waiting.  Eventually, two adults — Gwen Holbrook and Alan Smith — were the last to arrive, and they always arrived last and always at the same time.  Nancy and Quentin each gave out calls of "Bye-bye, Miss Loretta" and "See ya tomorrow, Mr. Freddy," as they raced out to meet up with their ride.

"You alive, honey?" Loretta inquired with a sugary smile, offering her hand to help Freddy up.

"God, where the hell — excuse me — heck do kids get all that energy and where can I get some?" Freddy asked with a chuckle, combing his hair back and patting his pants to make sure that Smith boy, Quentin, didn't try to steal his wallet again.  The kid had a skilful habit of it.  Sneaky little brat.

Ah, good, wallet intact.  Now, let's see if he still had cash in it...

"Fred, what happened to your hand?" asked Loretta with a small gasp, as Freddy pulled off his right glove in order to dig through his wallet.  There was a long, clean gash diagonally across the back of his hand.  Bits of lint from his glove had adhered to the now congealed blood, making it look painful.

"What, that?  Must've accidentally knocked my hand against the pruning shears when I had my gloves off, that's all," Freddy replied with a careless shrug.  He looked at the cut with disinterest, not really worried about it.  He'd actually forgotten about it until Loretta pointed it out.  "Bled like hell."

"Did you use the first aid kit we've got in the supply closet?" she asked, running her finger across the gash in examination.

"You had a class in the playroom at the time.  I didn't want to freak 'em out.  Like I said, it bled like hell.  Probably best to clean it out now since I've been working in the dirt all day."

He looked down at his hands.  His gloves were wearing out.  The edges were tattered, the stitching was coming undone, and the leather was getting thin.  He'd have to make a mental note to pick up a few spare pairs from the hardware store on his way home.

Loretta led her husband tenderly by his injured hand inside the preschool, unlocking a supply closet in the main playroom and pulling out the first aid kit.  Freddy plopped down on a beanbag chair and leaned back.

"Oooh, gunna play 'Doctor,' are we?" he inquired with a mischievous smirk.  "I like that idea..."

Loretta shook her head, fighting not to smile, as she lightly dabbed rubbing alcohol on the cut.  Freddy inhaled sharply, letting out a mild grunt of pain, as his fingers curling into his palm on instinct.

Goddamn that stung!

"That dampen your mood any?" Loretta teased, as she began to wrap a gauze bandage around the cut.

Freddy leaned forward with, gently nipping the bottom of her ear between his teeth, before whispering:  "No, it only stoked the fire..."  His voice turned husky and gruff.  Loretta bit her bottom lip and her long lashes fluttered, feeling both uneasy and excited at the same time, as he ran his tongue lightly below her jaw.  "I need this, Lore.  You have no idea—"

Loretta lightly pushed him away and continued to look down, as she finished bandaging his hand.

He'd often propositioned her for sex here.  Normally, they'd sneak down to the maintenance room in the basement.  He had set up a moth-eaten bed downstairs specifically for this reason.  However, lately, Freddy had begun suggest that they should be a little more daring and make love in one of the classrooms.  It was an idea that both frightened and enticed her.  If they got caught...

Oh, but that was the least of her worries.

What worried her more was the fact that he suggested it in the first place.
Chapter I: "The Gardener"
Chapter II: "Déjà Vu"
Chapter III: "Of Sinners, Not Saints"
Chapter IV: "A Night at the Bar"
Chapter V: "Son of a Hundred Maniacs"
Chapter VI: "Dirty Little Secret"
Chapter VII: "Madonna and Child"
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Co-written with ~Lady-Rorschach and myself, Innocent Demon is a pastiche of our own interpretation of Freddy Krueger's origins for the Nightmare on Elm Street (2010) reboot, which we've been working on-and-off for over a year. We decided to revise what we have of the story so far because, originally, it was written before we really knew anything about the remake. All we had was an early draft of the Platinum Dunes' script and our encyclopaedic knowledge of the Robert Englund franchise (as well as novels, books, comics, TV shows, etc); now that remake has been released, we decided to keep it closer to the context of the 2010 film. This story is a conglomerate of characters from the original and remake, along with our own personal (revised) theories about the character, the film, and the franchise itself, as well as original ideas...

By personal request, this revised edition is uncensored. I prodded Abri consistently over this for more blood, more sex, more deprivation, more psychologically accuracy, and more Freddy being, well, Freddy as possible. The subject of paedophilia and serial rape, I believe, isn't something you should skate around. We're not condoning these, but desire to make it the audience aware of them, nor are we romanticizing the character into a "hero." In all seriousness, Freddy isn't a character you are meant to like. We wanted the audience to be "seduced" by the character into liking him, even sympathizing with him, and then feel dirtied by his unapologetic actions and feel guilty for being seduced by him in the first place. This takes place before the "death" of Frederick Charles Krueger.

The character of Loretta Krueger originally appeared in Freddy's Dead and there's practically next to no information about the character. I've found a scant few sources — one referenced Freddy and Loretta were high school sweethearts, another referenced her as a waitress at a nearby diner while he worked as a janitor, or her surname was only referenced as "Johnson" and nothing more — but, nonetheless, all of them were unreliable; none of them, not a single one, had citations, period. The truth is that Loretta has never appeared in any other official novelizations, comics, or subsequent medias in general, so we practically made the character from scratch for this story. We hope to give her a stronger, more endearing personality this time around and a far more interesting history to boot.

The chapter splash page above was created by me. We intend to add a new splash image for each chapter, possibly with the logo getting bloodier and bloodier as we get along. We'd also like to give a special shout-out to ~weapon13WhiteFang for being our Grammar Nazi.

Having difficulty with the mature filter? See Fanfiction.net.

Nightmare on Elm Street © Wes Craven/Platinum Dunes/New Line Cinema.
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Vermink Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really good. Well written with good detail :) Nice one.
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tranimation-art Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Professional Filmographer
Thanks!  I really appreciate that!
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the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
good story but im not a big fan of the 2010 elm sreet
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tranimation-art Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Filmographer
That's fine. But it does have lots of aspects of the original Englund franchise within the context of the story -- things from the Englund franchise I found appropriate and thus added to them to expand the details of the 2010 franchise, while other things I found were just plain ODD in the Englund franchise, so I altered aspects but still kept it as a "tribute" to the Englund franchise. For example, I added the characters from the Englund franchise, like Nancy's father (Sheriff Donald), Freddy's wife Loretta, his mother Sister Mary Helena, and eventually his father (Lead Maniac), but "reboot" them to fit within the 2010 franchise, but it's still a tribute to the original franchise.
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the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
i kind of got that but the original series didnt have freddy be all pedo that is my problem
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tranimation-art Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Filmographer
Actually, no, Freddy Krueger WAS a pedophile in the original franchise. It was subtle and insinuated most of the time, but other times, it was downright obvious; nevertheless, it was ALWAYS there. It always HAS been there. I don't know why people keep saying that it wasn't. From the first film, you had Marge say "he was a filthy old man who killed 20 kids" and said it "it was worse when the caught him," saying they learned what Freddy did was MORE than just murder. The death of Tina is actually an allegory to sexual rape: He's on top of Tina, the bed shakes as if sexually assaulted, she convulses as if she is sexual assaulted, and Tina gives all the metaphoric implications sexually assaulted along the ceiling. Even the phone scene where "Frenches" Nancy is an allegory to sexual (oral) rape and assault. The second film is saturated in Freudian sexual references in every assault, which was heavily homoerotic, yes, but sexual all the same. (To a pedophile, because the children are so young, they have no form of sexuality, that's why majority of pedophiles don't differentiate between male and female because they generally "sodomize" them, so there's no difference between the genders.) Third film, DREAM WARRIORS, you have the syringe scene as an allegory to sexual penetration. You have the scene where he's the phallic worm "devouring" his victim; again, sexual rape and sexual assault. In the FREDDY'S NIGHTMARE episode of "No More Mr. Nice Guy," which retelling of Freddy's origins, you had one of his victims alive, which was one of twin girls. That twin girl had all the red flags of a child rape victim. When Freddy escaped prosecution, he returns to his victim to murder not only the girl to "tattled" on him, but the twin sister as well, and he basically indicates he's going to rape both before killing them. In FREDDY VS. JASON, he licks the back of the photograph of one of his seven-year-old victims; again, sexualizing the crime.

The seventh film, NEW NIGHTMARE, is the most obvious of all Englund franchise. Dillon is a child rape victim. That's how he plays the character, Wes Craven was very, very specific about this. Dillon fears being touched that he withdraws from human contact in general, he fears Freddy grabbing him under his bedsheets (which is why he sleeps with his feet up and Rex guarding his feet), he vomits to signify oral sex, he convulses as if sexually assaulted. Freddy's dialogue is lines like "I have some gingerbread for ya" -- gingerbreading is slang oral sexual assault, forcing a submissive male to perform oral sex -- and you have "I touched him!" How OBVIOUS can you get? He also has lines like "I'm going to eat you all up" and extends his arm out in a phallus being erected, and then proceeds to LICK Dillon, and then DEVOUR his head in an extremely sexualized fashion.

Freddy has ALWAYS been a pedophile, ALWAYS has been. Wes Craven has confirmed this. Robert Englund has confirmed this. Heather Langenkamp has confirmed this. What more evidence do you need?
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the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
well im only 13 so im still learning most of that stuff but in the original series it is still subtle
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tranimation-art Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Filmographer
It's not THATTTTT subtle, but it's subtle enough that people gloss over it, when the truth is...it's ALWAYS been there! Watch them again! Go see for yourself! It's honestly not very subtle at all.
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the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
mostly people and i dont like to think freddy as a pedo becuase it just...you know......wierd
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tranimation-art Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Filmographer
But that's what he is, you can't just gloss over it and say it doesn't exist. That is WHO he IS! That is what makes Freddy...Freddy. I may not like the comedic aspects of franchise, I prefer serious, psychological Freddy, which is why I love the first, third, seventh, and the reboot films the most, but you make it sound I enjoy the character because he is a pedophile. Honestly, I don't, but that is WHAT he is. He's a character. You take all the good and all bad because that's what makes him fascinating as a character.
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